Peer Response Summary

Writer's name: Karla Flores

Respondant's name: Ruchin Srisothorwongse
Kwang Shin

1. What global features did your colleagues like most about your work?

• intro to all the points in my intro
• evidence (michael jordan etc.)
• more evidence/ on how men are with friends as well as women. give examples
• research on women/men sports (ex: olympic games)
• reference page, when some men are stronger it is true. (extreme sports)

2. After analyzing your colleagues' feedback in terms of your purposes as a write, what do you plan to change when you revise your work? (be sure to focus on global issues here.)

• I plan to add more examples and research some stereotypes through the internet, etc.

Journal: STEREOTYPES IN SOCIETY



PART I Is enough information given about the group?
Yes


What other facts can I include about my group to help define it?
1. women can't do anything as well as men do
2. studs vs sluts
3. how women should be treated more lienient than males (how a girl can hit a guy but a guy cant hit a girl)

What experiences can I include that would help show readers what it’s like to be part of this group?

I am a woman and I experience these same things.

PART 2 What stereotypes or images are associated with my group?
EX: women cant compete against men in the same sport.

Where could I find evidence for these? What else can I use as evidence of images I have included? (Please be specific. )

1. personal experience
2. everyday life
3. media

PART 3 (This part may not be finished if all the data hasn’t been gathered.) What do you think some of the reasons might be for the images in Part 2? Are some of them valid? Some not? Which ones? Why?

1. it is a stereotype against women and some are valid like the athleticism

Online Discussion

Davis was raised into a family that had both of his parents deaf and he struggled with it because people would see him differently because he lived with deaf people. He didn't come to realize to appreciate the deafness of his parents until his later years. I dont really relate to him about that becuase I've never been ashamed of my parents even if they cant really speak english very well. It didn't matter to me whether or not they couldnt speak it because just as long as i can communicate with them, i will be fine. It doesnt really matter what other people think about them because it only matters to you.

Coming from a dysfunctional family can be hard but he needed to pull through the weight because if you are not happy with your family then you might not be happy with yourself.

What Davis means in "working class experience has been a guide" to his life because he was more into school and finishing his schoolwork than staying at home. He would spend hours at school pulling his grade to be the best to go from the ghetto high school to Columbia University. He worked hard to be the best he can be and it gave him a great experience because it was worth it in the end.

Logical Fallacy

1. http://www.newamericandimensions.com/images/naughty1.jpg

Topic: Minors in Adult Chatrooms

Thesis: Minors should be blocked from entering adult chatrooms by creating a program that lets parents have full control on the internet by having a pass code that allows their children to use the internet without the adult chatrooms.

Purpose: To prevent minors from entering adult chatrooms where adults can lure the minors into meeting them and eventually taking advantage of them.

Exercise 9-3
Analyzing Assumptions (9d)

1. Murders should pay for their crimes with their lives.
Assumption: Each murder was incidental.
Support needed? Yes this does need support because you don't know why they murdered them.

2. To vote for capital punishment is to vote for killing people.
Assumption: If you vote for capital punishment you're automatically killing someone when you do so.
Support needed? No, it's self explanitory.

3. Capital Punishment is murder; it is the taking of human life.
Assumption: Capital punishment is bad.
Support needed? No, it's self explanitory.

4. Spanking is not an appropriate way for parents to discipline their children.
Assumption: The children did something bad.
Support needed? Yes, they need to explain why they children need to get spanked.

5. Spanking as a means of discipline gives children the message that hitting is okay.
Assumption: Hitting is okay since their parents hit them too.
Support needed? Yes, they need to explain why they are going to hit them.

6. There are better ways of disciplining children than spanking.
Assumption: Spanking children is not the only way.
Support needed? No

7. By donating to the Open Your Heart fund, you will ease the plight of hungry and homeless people in your locality.
Assumption: You will help others by donating.
Support needed? No

8. Helping the hungry and homeless is a serious business.
Assumption: The homeless needs all the help they can get.
Support needed? Yes, they need to explain what is serious about it.

9. We must act quickly to end the slaughter of dolphins.
Assumption: They are hurting dolphins.
Support needed? No, it's self explanitory.

10. No one knows how many dolphin kills have gone unreported.
Assumption: They are hurting dolphins without getting caught.
Support needed? No, it's self explanitory.

Dear Miami-Dade School Board,

My name is Karla Flores and I am a mother of a 4 year old. I have read the article about your school banning the book "A visit to Cuba," and I completely disagree to what your actions implied to. Although the parent that wanted the book banned because of his experience in Cuba doesnt mean that the children can't learn about the country. Children from the ages of 5 to 7 doesnt know the history and the politics from Cuba and I feel that they don't need to know about it because they wouldn't understand it. Children should be able to explore and expand their minds into different places of the world other than the city and country they live in. They should be aware that there is a whole different side of the world completely opposite from us that can also be fun and entertaining. Children might have minds of their own but they dont completely understand the political issues going on in that country and I feel that they don't need to know about it until they are mature enough to talk about it. A person does not stay a between the ages of 5 and 7 long so I believe that they should be able to be creative and think what they want to think about the country or any other place in the world. One day they might be opposing to your side but since they're children, I believe that their imagination and creativity should be expanded and banning this book and any other book that relates to different third world countries will prevent them from doing so. Taking this first step of banning this book and the other books related to it has opened doors for parents such as this one to step up to yours or anybody else's school board to prevent their child from learning an important aspect to the world. I have a daugther who is 4 years old and I want her to learn about the rest of the world and how the rest of the world is living not just ours. I want her to expand her mind and explore the world because I know that eventually she would want to visit these places. Imagination is the key to these books and that's why these books are created to give imagination to the children and let their mind explore the life at Cuba, for instance. Let children be children while it lasts, don't prevent things like this parent wants you to do to children and keep them from learning. Thank you for your time.

Sincerely,
Karla Flores

1. watch tv
2. sleep
3. shop
4. play piano
5. play volleball
6. go online
7. talk on the phone
8. hang out with friends
9. eat
10. driving

1. I know how to turn the tv on and switch channels. I also know how to put it on favorites.
2. I know how to lye down and close my eyes.
3. I know how to spend my money at stores when I see something I like.
4. I know how to read notes and which keys are which notes. I also know the tempo on each piece by looking at the sign. I know which chord is for your left and right hand.
5. I know how to play the game, the rules, how many people on the court, what positions, dive, hit, block, serve, etc.
6. I know how to click internet explorer and browse online
7. i know how to use my phone, dial the numbers, call someone, store their number, put ringtones on their number.
8. I know how to hang.
9. I know how to put food in my mouth, chew and swallow.
10. I know how to start the engine, put it in gear, step on the gas, step on the brakes and put it on hand brakes.

I CHOSE VOLLEYBALL!

Why others should care:
Others should care about my topic because one day they might want to play volleyball or teach their kids how to play volleyball. They would need to know the rules and the moves of how to hustle in volleyball.

Sensory Details

1. Sitting on a damp pavement next to the pool and seeing my mother in the spectators' bleachers (sight),

2. ....holding my sister on her lap (touch).

3. I heard him call out. (Sound)

4. no smell

5. no taste

My 2nd Year Confirmation Retreat

1. At Oxidental Camp site
2. Confirmation retreat
3. Everyone in my confirmation class was there
4. stayed for one weekend from Friday through Sunday
5. Different events for each day
6. Did group work and created a cinnamon roll by everyone holding hands and going in a circle
7. The big group talks that the confirmation leaders gave us that touched our lives.
8. Scavenger hunt Saturday night
9. Gathering around the bonfire and having someone read a passage from the bible
10. Getting our love letters from our parents
11. More activities on Sunday for team bonding in relation of God
12. Sunday mass where we got our confirmation cross

"Chase" Scenes

1. playing football (1)
2. playing baseball (1)
3. creating snowballs (4)
4. throwing snowballs (2)
5. man got out of car and started to chase them (7)
6. chased after them block after block, picket fence after picket fence, etc. (2)
7. caught them and started to lecture them (2)

Thought Provoking question

Was it really necessary for the guy to chase the kids just to say " You stupid kids!" ?

I think that he wanted to chase them because he enjoyed to chase them around. He also said in the essay " I wanted the glory to last forever."

Introduction 1

Does the environment really effect our way of speaking with people? Does it change our communication due to the language and age? The answer to both of these questions are yes, because our brain was developed to exchange communication with another by the difference of age and environment. The way we speak in professional environments in front of mature adults has a different effect to speaking with our peers at school. Our families also has a different effect to our language because we might be more comfortable speaking our native language with one another due to the connection to our culture. For example, we might be teaching our baby cousins our native language so that when they grow up they can speak it along with us to show respect to their culture. Our environment definitely has a huge effect on the way we speak towards one another.

Introduction 2

"Language forces us to perceive the world as man presents it to us," said Julia Penelope. The world offers us many different ways of using language due to language courses and classes. The environment forces and lets our minds know what is surrounding us and how we should adjust to the language around us. In a professional environment, our language has changed from the regular slang to the language used by others in our environment. For example, if someone worked at a hospital, they would use the hospital language where they use abbreviations and substitutes for certain words. If we were speaking with our peers at school, we would use our normal language where we use slang terminology because we will feel more comfortable to use it around our peers. At family gatherings, one might use their native language as part of communicating with their families. Our language really depends on where we are and who we are with and that's how our brain determines what language to use.

Both essays are talking about the main languages of their native tongue. The essay from Welsh was put in a very formal form while the other one was about informal. It was usually support from her experience and the one from Welsh was from research rather than experience. They are both informative about the mother tongue. The one in the Welsh was more demanding where you had to learn the language when the other one was just like a bonus to learn the language. Both essays are good but very different from each other.

Is learning the "new languange" necessary for all medical and hospital staff?

My reading compared to Adler's reading is about the same because I do read between the lines and I think about what the author really means rather than just reading to pass through time and getting it over with. The only difference between me and Adler is probably marking the book. Marking the book is something I don't normally do because I believe that if I buy a book as expensive as $30-$200 I wouldn't want to ruin it by simply writing on it. If I buy a paperback book that I simply need to write on or need something to remind me of what I was thinking at the time, I would do it. Otherwise, I regularly wouldn't.

The way that Adler reads a book is by going through each word and sentence one by one and really thinking about it. He either underlines the words and phrases he likes or the most important points of the paragraph. He will put foot notes on the margin to remind himself what he was thinking or questioning about at the time. This is something I would do if I was marking my book. I would simply highlight most of the important parts of the book and leave myself foot notes on what I was thinking at the time. Our differences in reading are simply mere but like I said, marking a book is something I normally don't do.

Karla Flores

This story is rather interesting because I have never heard most of these excuses. I, myself have used one of the excuses which was the “family emergency” but the other ones seem like a classic. The categories that Segal identifies in the story were: the family, the best friend, the evils of dorm life, the evils of technology, and the totally bizarre. Each type of category has it’s own type of excuse and it seems all very true unless you have heard them over and over like a teacher would.
Some of the excuses were rather exaggerated because we know that people wouldn’t really lie about having their grandfather/grandmother die just to get out of a deadline. Family excuses are usually the most believable ones and the least believable would probably the most bizarre ones. Although the bizarre excuses don’t seem real, they can be the most legitimate excuse they can have.
The technology problems are the most technical problems because most computers or any electronic device are not perfect and they do have bugs on them. It’s harder to work with technology these days but most of the time it’s very useful and very easy. We just need to find the best type of technology to use and a warranty to back it up. Dorm life is not as believable as the rest of the excuses because they are the most common excuse used by college students these days. The excuses Segal stated on this paper seemed more exaggerated than usual and should be looked into more carefully.